Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this modern society, it is reasonable to say that the power of marketing has gone further than what we would expect. An inevitable consequence is that popular goods with vibrant advertisements are widely chosen by the majority of customers. This, however, may affect the society as a whole on the grounds that its real needs are not fulfilled. This essay will look into both sides of the argument and discuss more about them.
To begin with, advertising nowadays is undoubtedly very appealing, which draws many people into buying things they don't really need. To be more specific, some companies even invite celebrities to advertise for their products, and this turns out to be quite effective. Many people are easily tempted by this strategy and spend money on unnecessary stuff. What is more, products that are carefully prepared for advertising usually seem more gorgeous and of better quality than they actually do. However, it is this wonderful, perfect shell that really attracts people and make them buy the goods without careful consideration.
On the other hand, the power of advertising doesn't really conceal the real needs of the society. In other words, people all have their own habits and usually they don't tend to buy things which are not their cup of tea. For instance, womans usually don't spend money on things like video games and technology, unless they actually want to. However, it is suggested that governments or local authorities should set out a limitation to the amount of money that can be used for shopping, so that people can keep it in mind and have a better control over their choices. As a result, they will have to take everything into consideration to make the best decision possible.
To sum up, the rapid growth of advertising has made it one of the most powerful businesses in this society. However, people should be aware of its influence and only choose to buy products which are truly essential and vital in their life. Only then can they manage their finance better and fulfill their own needs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, look, may, really, so, then, for instance, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91907514451 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53608393817 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554913294798 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6488075843 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.117647059 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164768236451 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568064868689 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473213851186 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103058407219 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263040827053 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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