Today large shopping centers and supermarkets are more common than small local shops Is this a negative or posite development

Essay topics:

Today large shopping centers and supermarkets are more common than small local shops. Is this a negative or posite development?

It is a well-known fact that in the contemporary world, the number of large shopping centers and supermarkets are increasing and they become more popular than small local shops. I enunciate the idea that this trend is positive due to the increase number of jobs and the attractions for tourism.

First, spacious shopping centers and supermarkets create more jobs than small local shops. Many people are able to take responsibilities for several jobs. In addition, people work in large shopping centers and supermarkets have better salary, working conditions and benefits, such as healthcare payment. Vincom, for example, is one of the most biggest shopping center in Vietnam. It contribute to solve unemployment problems by employing a large number of local younger people.

Second, it is not uncommon that shopping centers and supermarkets become the attraction sites which contribute a lot to tourism development. They are paradise of shopping lovers, therefore, attracts a lot of interest from not only local people but also tourists. For example, Singapore is a small country which doesn’t have much natural movements. This country has invested and built several large shopping markets that brings them a thousand of tourists every day. It becomes one of the most important income to contribute economy growth of Singapore.

In conclusion, it is obvious that the development of large shopping centers and supermarkets have many positive effect. I believe that they pave the way for the economy growth through creating various jobs and attracting tourists

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use only 'biggest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: biggest
...ent. Vincom, for example, is one of the most biggest shopping center in Vietnam. It contribu...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the biggest'.
Suggestion: most the biggest
...ent. Vincom, for example, is one of the most biggest shopping center in Vietnam. It contribu...
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Message: Did you mean 'contributes'?
Suggestion: contributes
... biggest shopping center in Vietnam. It contribute to solve unemployment problems by emplo...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...olve unemployment problems by employing a large number of local younger people. Second, it is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1325.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40816326531 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86740431346 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526530612245 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6103953064 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.6428571429 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418512730943 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145069650609 0.084324248473 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128952745694 0.0667982634062 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268828809829 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573377654333 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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