Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on outdoor sports Why is it a positive or negative development

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Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on outdoor sports. Why, is it a positive or negative development.

Most of adolescent spend their maximum time on computer games and give minimum time to outdoor games because technical gedgets easily available in everywhere for playing . This easy will be discussed both pros and cons of the development in upcoming pharagraphs.

To embark with, children are busy in their hectic schedule . This is because they do study then they have to do school work so that they can not go outside and spend their spare time on computer games. Secondly. Parents do not allow to go outside for play because crime rate increasing day by day . Every parents want to keep secure and save. So they give more preference indoor games because in indoor offspring do not need any special person for their safety.

Nevertheless,computer games leads many problems related to health . Namely, obesity, weekness eyesight soon. The excessive use of such games cause chubyness because they are guild with this gedgets late night. They do not do any physically activities which create many problems themselves. Furthermore, due to these games offspring distract their study because such games very interesting to play so they give less preference to study . They may think study is boreing and always think about that games. However , positive of these games can not be ignored because with the help of this games children broden their horizon of knowledge because that games are very worthwhile to enhance the vocabulary and get some good idea for their life . For example, puzzle and word makeing games are very advantageous when child play that games they have to use their mind to complete sentence so that they improve vocabulary.

To sum up, both games have equally importance . Thus, in my point of view, children should play outdoors games which is fruitful to live hale and hearty and stay away from disease.

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Average: 7.1 (42 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02317880795 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5628194834 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549668874172 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.5960154487 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2352941176 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211806530354 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681712103306 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737524040488 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149357989877 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571055494595 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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