In today s competitive world many families find it necessary for both parents go to out to work While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income others feel their lack support because of their parents absence Discuss both t

Essay topics:

In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go to out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel their lack support because of their parents’ absence.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that the both parents who have jobs would earn more income. Meanwhile, others argue that their children might sense abandoned because their parents are not there for them. In this essay, I would describe the both of these opinions.

To begin with the increased of human’s needs and it also becomes more expensive day by day moreover the cost of education. Every parent undoubtedly guarantees their children obtain schooling that have a certain but it would take them an arm and a leg. For example, fifteen years ago, the first time kids touched formal education were in the kindergarten at five to six years old and it is not required. However, there is new additional pre-school called playground which is provided for preschoolers who aged three to four. Most parents want their children want to get to get it and it is not cheap. Moreover, with the more income, they could also let them allow informal teaching and buy the latest gadget.

The children might feel deserted because parents do not spend plenty time with them. Thus, the lessons of life which are not necessarily taught in the school would not be gained. Also, they are more like to be alone and do anything they want without any permission. It could lead them to criminal activities. The case in this point that usually we found is waste their education fee to buy something dangerous such as drugs. Therefore, their future would be broken and become the burden to their parents.

All in all, this is might be true that the pair parent own career could cover the growth of living cost. But, I think the children would suffer if their parents are consumed by their jobs. Therefore, parents need to always keep in touch with them.

Votes
Average: 7.1 (11 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 568, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to get'.
Suggestion: to get
.... Most parents want their children want to get to get it and it is not cheap. Moreover, with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i think, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79264214047 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35245710459 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57525083612 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2584792562 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.6111111111 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231088273384 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748294458237 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681044481911 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161832774352 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605111602648 0.056905535591 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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