Topic 003: some people think computers and the internet are important in children’s study, but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers.
Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
The way children study, are radically different from those of any previous generation, and one of the most revolutionary changes is the application of computers as well as the internet. Education systems have sparked off the heated controversy over whether technology or teacher is the better choice for an effective training program. Personally, I think the instruction of teachers is still indispensible and will support my view with reasons and examples in this essay.
To begin with, people supporting internet and computers point out its ability to facilitate independent and economical study. Indeed, thanks to free lessons and software available on many websites, students can approach necessary materials without expenses. In addition, because the materials are originated from everywhere and are available every time, computers and the internet enable them to stay in part and study whenever they want, unlike attending traditional classes. However, there are question marks over the precision of its knowledge, which may not be recognized or authorized. Furthermore, due to students are unable to question and exchange fact with each other, it lacks of interaction is also a minus making this method less efficient.
In contrast, traditional education also has its own strength. Despite the subjectiveness of teachers place it at a disadvantage, its interaction is still high, because when children go to school, they will be able to learn from not only instructors but also each other. In addition, teachers are experienced enough to ensure that students’ development is orchestrated stage by stage, and their acquisition of knowledge is guided and backed up in a systematic way, which is less likely to achieve when they learn by computer of on the internet.
To sum up, there is no denying the fact that the internet and computers are of great use in assisting children’s study, but traditional training seems to be more effective thanks to its high interaction and likeliness to equip students with systematic development. Technology should be encouraged to become an assistant rather than to substitute teacher in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, well, i think, in addition, in contrast, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43452380952 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10056775578 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592261904762 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.9033413366 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.461538462 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227619204926 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701867467003 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516548875904 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129834551359 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00774659351781 0.056905535591 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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