It is true that an increasing trend in obesity among young children are happening in urban centres. This essay will discuss the reasons behind this phenomenon and offer some feasible solutions to it.
Granted, the rise in obesity rate can be mainly explained by the development of technology in urban areas. This is because most children in this areas are likely to get access to a great deal of modern technology such as Iphone and Ipad, which were invented as a way to make users addicted to them. With these addictive technologies being easily accessible, urban children would be addicted to games and suffer from being obese, which may lead them a passive lifestyle. Thus, these centres are witnessing an increase in obesity among their children due to the advance made in modern technology.
Various measures, nevertheless, can be adopted to tackle the situation. The first possible approach is that there is a need for governments to place more emphasis on physical subjects at schools. It is crucial for young children to do exercises on a regular basis as a way to prevent them from being obese, so this method can be viable if governments make physical discipline compulsory at schools. Furthermore, developing technology in a positive way can a part of negotiating this situation. Since technology has an enormous impact on children lifestyle, it should be developed positively, say, it should encourage children to do exercise more regularly, which is likely to result in a decrease in obesity among children.
In conclusion, the development of technology can be given to explain why urban areas are witnessing a growth in obesity among children. However, steps that I mentioned above can be taken in order to alleviate the situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07986111111 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87483015803 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545138888889 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5693203303 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.538461538 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2762263107 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108597625194 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115395259747 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202786756372 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086624082702 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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