Many people believe that attending a live show is more amusing than watching broadcasting events on TV channels whereas I am of the opinion that we should enjoy it at home.
On the one hand, spectating live events is more pleasurable for several reasons. Firstly, these performances can provide spectators with a genuine experience. It is commonly acknowledged that they can feel the euphoria blending into the cheering crowd and immerse in the vivid atmosphere created by the visual and sound effects of a live performance. Secondly, this is a chance for fans to interact in person with famous performers. For example, audiences in a BTS concert may talk intimately and play games with their idols, which makes them feel more pleasurable
On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why I believe that watching the same events on television is more exhilarating. One major cause of this is cost-effectiveness. Since almost ticket prices of these concerts are exorbitantly expensive for ordinary people to afford so that watching such events in front of the screen is not only convenient but also helps us to save money. Moreover, viewers can enjoy performances to the fullest. This is because they may avoid hassles including the risk of being injured when being in a crowd.
In conclusion, while some maintain that live shows offer more recreational experience, I believe that it is better to enjoy it at home as it is more economical and convenient.
In my opinion, the organizing committee should facilitate suitable conditions for people to have an affordable cost and guarantee safety so that everyone can attend the live shows
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ould enjoy it at home. On the one hand, spectating live events is more pleasurab...
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..., which makes them feel more pleasurable On the other hand, there are a variety o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04411764706 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93554608137 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599264705882 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.830825097 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.333333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291925789694 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937256711098 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660947735628 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142988448236 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787979163242 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ould enjoy it at home. On the one hand, spectating live events is more pleasurab...
^^
Line 2, column 565, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., which makes them feel more pleasurable On the other hand, there are a variety o...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04411764706 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93554608137 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599264705882 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.830825097 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.333333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6666666667 7.06120827912 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291925789694 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937256711098 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660947735628 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142988448236 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787979163242 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.