Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Since the television are invented, people can watch performances through their television such as a play, concert, or sporting event instead going to theater or stadium to watch them lively. It brings many benefits to people, especially who cannot afford a ticket to watch that events at that time. However, some people claim that television take away the exciting from the live events compare to watch it at the performing place. From my point of view, I strongly agree with the statement that live programs bring more appealing and interesting to audiences that the television do.
Firstly, people can feel the atmosphere at the competition. When people attend the live events, their enjoyment can be fill with shouting, clapping, stomping by the crowd to cheer the match create the air that the ones who not join the crowd cannot perceive. For example, in a football match, besides watching the goal and match happening, they enter the gathering show their emotions and make the memorable moment. Secondly, people can hang out with friends or family by going to stadium with camera and food to enjoy the performances such as concert. It bring people closer together which strengthen the friendship just by taking pictures, drinking beverage and following the show. Last but not least, people can watch the plays more clearly than on T.V and there is a chance to interact with the performers and get their sign and take a picture with celebrities which the people who watch through the screen cannot get.
On the other hand, watching a live performance which broadcast brings many advantages to people. One of those is the cost to buy a ticket is much larger than the bill that people pay for watching it on media devices. Moreover, it not only the money but also the time people can save because they don't need to travel to occurring place, queue up, security check and many more. Whereas others just sit at their home and turn on the TV set right on the time. Another advantage is they can watch the game clearly just like they stand next to players. For instance, people could watch a football match much closer to players through the camera compare to people who just buy the eco seat which far away from a court.
In conclusion, there are variable choices for people to watch a performances. Watching through the screen or watching lively at real-time and real-place, they both deliver the benefits and disadvantages to people. With wisely choosing between saving money and time or having a best experience, people can appreciate the events with the perfectness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'brings'?
Suggestion: brings
...oy the performances such as concert. It bring people closer together which strengthen...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: V
... watch the plays more clearly than on T.V and there is a chance to interact with ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...o the time people can save because they dont need to travel to occurring place, queu...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a performance' or simply 'performances'?
Suggestion: a performance; performances
...re variable choices for people to watch a performances. Watching through the screen or watchin...
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...between saving money and time or having a best experience, people can appreciate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 437.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88787185355 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48569260808 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508009153318 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8656978285 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.421052632 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301263377455 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100848653944 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833987132109 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213519088259 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115826057818 0.056905535591 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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