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we live in a world of technology these days while internet brings with clear advantage. the problems in term of security of information outweighs the advantage to what extent you are agree.

Essay topics: we live in a world of technology these days while internet brings with clear advantage. the problems in term of security of information outweighs the advantage to what extent you are agree.

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With the advent of time technology is improving day by day. One of the greatest recent invention is computer and internet. Due to this remarkable invention everyone is connected to each other. Although internet has tremendous advantages but has some drawbacks too. Some people think that it is effecting privacy of mankind. I strongly agree with this point. This essay will explain my views with example.
First of all computers and internet has effected personal life a lot. It is very hard to keep anything secret now ad days. For example with the use of phone apps every persons location is accessable . Although this can be used as a positive way but there is no privacy at all. In the same way face book and twitter has been used to indulge others personal life. Usually this is has effected all ages but mostly children. So it is very important for parents to watch children while they are using internet. It is very crucial for safety of children too.
Secondly, there are huge security issues at higher levels. Since every department in government is computerized , there is big challenge for security. Recently it is found that there a big hacking groups all over the world. So this is very easy to hack all information from anyone. So this can effect security of a country.
In final, it is very important that how a technology is used. Internet is a great advantage if it is used in a positive direction. If we use internet in right way it has more advantages. On the other hand if it is used with negative intention, it can effect everyone,s security. It is recommended to make a good use of invention so that the whole world become a peaceful place to live.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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With the advent of time technology is im...
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...ay will explain my views with example. First of all computers and internet has ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...xample with the use of phone apps every persons location is accessable . Although this ...
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...pps every persons location is accessable . Although this can be used as a positive...
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...ry crucial for safety of children too. Secondly, there are huge security issues...
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...department in government is computerized , there is big challenge for security. Re...
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...this can effect security of a country. In final, it is very important that how ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, first of all, in my view, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64864864865 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6162103416 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557432432432 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 16.7033409832 49.4020404114 34% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.04 106.682146367 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.84 20.7667163134 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.72 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144494380658 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423468436524 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415561531713 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934680060079 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417754365245 0.056905535591 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 13.0946893788 49% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 50.2224549098 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.8 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 9.78957915832 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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