We should introduce laws to make businesses and state services employ equal numbers of male and female workers in every department or area of the company

Essay topics:

We should introduce laws to make businesses and state services employ equal numbers
of male and female workers in every department or area of the company.

There are numerous objections towards the policy of employment throughout the world. It is claimed by people that authorities should impose laws in which force corporations and organizations to employ employees of both gender equally in all sector. I strongly believe this idea and I am going to delve deeply into this issue.

On the one hand, having equal number of woman and men would bring large number of benefits to communities. Firstly, it would build up the frequency of skilled and experienced work-forces which would effectively contribute to boost in all parts of a country. As everyone know, woman are struggling hardly with discrimination that is running against them in finding job opportunities. Hence, heads of nations should pass laws that ease the way female could have job as much as men. Subsequently, these actions would not only lead to more bright female generation in the future, but also they could bring up their child with more knowledge and appropriate perspective about future.

On the other hand, not having woman in job sectors such as industry and official jobs could illustrate negative consequences. For instance, there are several position that women could get through and excel better than men such tasks which are related to education and nursing. Thus, not having adequate female experts would result in hazardous effects on this sector of community. Furthermore, in art sector and designing that is needy of tender heart and artistic mind, women could take part exemplary. Of course, I think female are able to attend and be employed in every sector of industry and organization, so by unifying their efforts they could handle all the jobs whatever are their beloved.

To conclude, woman and men should possess the same proportion of job opportunity in either industry or organization. Not only would these result in having elite and skilled future generation, but also our society would benefit of having adequate adept and versatile expert and workforces in all area of community.

Votes
Average: 9.6 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...aws that ease the way female could have job as much as men. Subsequently, these act...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun position seems to be countable; consider using: 'several positions'.
Suggestion: several positions
...e consequences. For instance, there are several position that women could get through and excel ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, so, thus, for instance, i think, of course, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17021276596 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74449739699 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580547112462 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8087046364 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.4 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0952454150585 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339913179124 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397157079964 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626074820357 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260458984269 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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