As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?
The idea that, besides making money, enterprises also need to have public
responsibilities remains a source of controversy. In my opinion, while generating
profit is the top priority for each company, I agree that they should also conduct
their business in a socially responsible manner.
On the one hand, the efforts of companies to maximise their profits may have some
benefits for society as a whole. [1] Firstly, the higher the profits earned by
enterprises, the more taxes they pay to the government. As a result, authorities
may have more revenue to spend in key fields, including education and health care,
which leads to an improvement in the quality of life of the whole community. [2]
Secondly, by earning huge profits companies have the opportunity to grow their
business. For example, firms could use their capital to expand their production,
creating new job opportunities within the community.
On the other hand, there are strong reasons why businesses should also accept that
they have social responsibilities. [1] The first reason is that their activities have an
effect on the environment. Without controls, production processes may result in
serious environmental degradation, such as global warming stemming from factory
emissions or the irresponsible disposal of industrial waste. For example, if
factories installed waste treatment systems instead of discharging chemical wastes
into rivers, water pollution could be controlled. [2] Another reason is that
enterprises should help those who are less fortunate, since they have the money to
do so. For example, big corporations such as Unilever and Vinamilk have
enhanced their public image through philanthropic actions such as providing
scholarships and giving charitable donations.
In conclusion, although I recognise that making profits is the fundamental principle
of business, I would argue that all businesses should profoundly reflect upon their
social responsibilities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91245791246 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12443036335 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.774399823 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.428571429 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7857142857 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 26.0 4.38176352705 593% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22329259039 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769988689454 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787474559234 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.059376140059 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810910388918 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.0 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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