When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

By blooming technology advances in every society, tremendous changes would appear. Nobody can refuse that high and modern technology really are helpful for people’s daily life.

Huge boost in every society’s technology has made people be proud of their country and also, it increases their quality of life. Modern technology would help human kinds in every field of their life. For example: agriculture, economy, industry, transportation, education, medicine, engineering to name but few. As far as I’m concerned, advantages of technological life are significantly more than its disadvantages. For example, machinery and robotic mechanisms in industry, for example in factories make preparing lines more faster than manual mechanism (workers) and of course it helps saving time for increasing efficiency.

In contrast, specially in under developing countries, there are people covering their life expenses by working in factories or helping farmers and of course by technology advances they would loose their job positions and workers replace by machines and robots. Their life conditions would become worse and technological advances would spoil their life. Because, it is important to have enough knowledge for prospering in high technological works and professional jobs related to technological fields. Obtaining traditional skills really are different than professional jobs and instead of having huge knowledge in special fields, everyone by try and error and obtaining some experiences can do them.

To conclude, technology advances make life easer than the past. It helps people in many aspects of their life. But it would be better among these high speed gears of technology, governments would consider the life expenses of people loosing their jobs by coming technology to make life easer for them too.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
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Suggestion: faster
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to save' or 'save'.
Suggestion: to save; save
...echanism workers and of course it helps saving time for increasing efficiency. In ...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ourse by technology advances they would loose their job positions and workers replace...
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Line 5, column 552, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...traditional skills really are different than professional jobs and instead of having...
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Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
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...nowledge in special fields, everyone by try and error and obtaining some experiences ca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, for example, in contrast, in fact, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67272727273 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9873474234 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5205291769 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.428571429 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0916049861439 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385535484299 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319120707661 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601763295857 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272353756089 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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