Whether or not someone achieve their aims is mostly a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Everybody yearns for a bit of luck at some point in their life when things are seem hard. Many will argue that luck is something one is born with while not having to work hard for anything in their life, others differ in their opinion.
History has taught and given us valuable lessons that luck, even though may seem necessary, it is hard work and determination that makes one achieve his/her goals. No one has achieved greatness being lazy!
Karl Benz who is believed to be the first to have built the automobile car had a dream and through pure determination, hard work and dedication he brought to reality his dream. True he was lucky to have been born in Germany and also to have received a good education which his mother strove upon despite having to live in poverty. Another example is the high-school drop out Bill Gates. He was obsessed with computers and dropped out of school in order to pursue his dream. His hard work and determination has payed off which has earned him a place among the Forbes richest men. From humble beginnings, he has created the multi-billion dollar Microsoft empire which is the basis of all computer programming software. Similarly, Steve Jobs like Bill Gates created the modern Apple brand and the first smartphone, which has become a basic necessity in the everyday household.
Therefore, it is my belief and opinion that how one achieve his/her aims is not through luck but more through hard work, determination and dedication. Luck is purely having made conscious and the right choices is life to become a successful individual. Learning from failures and using those as stepping stones to achieve greatness is the will to succeed which has nothing to do with luck. I believe luck is reserved to when someone wins the Lotto. But even then, isn’t it pure will and the effort that person took to buy the winning ticket which rendered him lucky in the first place?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'seemed'.
Suggestion: seemed
...ome point in their life when things are seem hard. Many will argue that luck is some...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254143646409 0.247107183377 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.204419889503 0.155533422707 131% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0745856353591 0.0946595960268 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0303867403315 0.0501214627716 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0524861878453 0.0437548338989 120% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0911602209945 0.122226691241 75% => OK
Participles: 0.0635359116022 0.0403226058552 158% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.49169581763 2.80594681477 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0386740331492 0.0326793684256 118% => OK
Particles: 0.00552486187845 0.00163938923432 337% => OK
Determiners: 0.0718232044199 0.0861772015684 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0110497237569 0.021408717616 52% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0331491712707 0.011925033212 278% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1919.0 1933.35771543 99% => OK
No of words: 332.0 316.048096192 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78012048193 6.12580529183 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.313253012048 0.374742101984 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.213855421687 0.28420135186 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.132530120482 0.203846283523 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0873493975904 0.137316102897 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49169581763 2.80594681477 89% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.037074148 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581325301205 0.56093040696 104% => OK
Word variations: 64.9847457108 60.7387585426 107% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.75 20.7743622355 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0544132067 49.517814964 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.9375 127.492653851 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.7743622355 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.814263465372 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 42.1355421687 49.1944974215 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.42307692308 1.69124875643 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164567504721 0.332605444948 49% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114325997009 0.102741220458 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0737557121592 0.0668466124924 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.53542138836 0.534860350844 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14674859251 0.148594505496 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722004413187 0.134430193775 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554330768587 0.0742795772207 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.243652402916 0.324371583561 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.146859744961 0.0638462369009 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116710057817 0.228012699653 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571232977376 0.058150111329 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.68436873747 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 5.90881763527 237% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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