Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There have always been differences in types of work men and women have done. However, the trend in recent time for both men and women to have greater freedom of choice in terms of employment. Some people might say that there is no need to go further. However, in my view, gender quality should be encouraged.
There may indeed be good arguments for allowing certain jobs to remain predominantly males or females. For example patients in all female hospital word would having female nurses to look after them. It could be also argued that certain jobs requiring great physical strong for example, cool mining or logging and should continue to be full by male only.
However, making occupations more open to both gender has a great advantages. Male police, for example, may have greater understanding of violence and better range of strategies to deal with this problems. Similarly female primary school teachers have better understanding of young children need and can look after them more than males.
To sum up, to allow men or women for dominant occupation still an argument between people and to change this result may be subtle.
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Essay evaluation report
However, the trend in recent time for both men and women to have greater freedom of choice in terms of employment.
However, the trend in recent time for both men and women is to have greater freedom of choice in terms of employment. //need a verb
would having female nurses
would be having female nurses
would have female nurses
It could be also argued that certain jobs requiring great physical strong
It could be also argued that certain jobs require great physical strong
has a great advantages
has a great advantage
still an argument between people
still an argument between two people
still an argument among people
Sentence: Male police, for example, may have greater understanding of violence and better range of strategies to deal with this problems.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and problems
flaws:
No. of Words: 191 350 //Minimum 250 words wanted
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 191 350
No. of Characters: 920 1500
No. of Different Words: 124 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.718 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.817 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.409 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 68 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.279 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.351 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...der quality should be encouraged. There may indeed be good arguments for allowin...
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Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ients in all female hospital word would having female nurses to look after them. It co...
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Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...both gender has a great advantages. Male police, for example, may have greater u...
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Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t advantages. Male police, for example, may have greater understanding of violen...
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Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...better range of strategies to deal with this problems. Similarly female primary scho...
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Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... strategies to deal with this problems. Similarly female primary school teachers have bet...
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Line 4, column 46, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m up, to allow men or women for dominant occupation still an argument between peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, still, for example, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 945.0 1615.20841683 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 191.0 315.596192385 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94764397906 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49256453005 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.643979057592 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 506.74238477 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9910677614 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9090909091 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3636363636 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175984231124 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677386580917 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421033523983 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102209683325 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325832798046 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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