Thanks to several breakthroughs in technological advances and the prosperity of society, more and more people are able to have more opportunities to join in labor workforce. It is true that workplaces nowadays have a crucial role to play in addressing unemployment and creating more fair environment between men and women in both aspects, especially in terms of number. From my perspective, this trend has brought various benefits for not only employee but also society as a whole.
In reality, the gender equality in workplaces is not completely beneficial in all circumstances. This is because the natural difference in terms of gene distribution and body structure is the main reason lead to the difference in other patterns such as thought, behavior and characteristic between male and female. As a result, in some particular jobs, probably male employee will outperform than the other gender and the opposite is reversed in some fields, which is typical for women. Take building industry as an example, with the majority of workers belong to male group. It is reasonable as during fierce working conditions with high demand on physical health, females, who are the symbol of weakness group, seem to be incompatible with this kind of jobs. Therefore, in such cases, the endeavor for seeking adequate female workers is regarded as ineffective for the sake of companies.
Despite this reasons mentioned above, I totally argue that the quantity similarity regardless gender in the workplaces have enormous effects on the development of society. Firstly, this trend, which surpasses social prejudices about women's role, can contribute to the freedom of female group to tackle inequality and discrimination all over the world. At a person level, female employees are able to access with career opportunities to strengthen their position in their own house, not only housewives, but also breadwinners. From the company's viewpoint, the presence of female in every corporation, firm and manufacture may blow a new cloud to boost productivity and working efficiency. According to statistic conducted in America in 2010, companies with the same number workers in both gender gained more 27% of profit than the other ones with the imbalance in the figure of male and female.
In conclusion, it is positive trend that many companies are willing to balance the gender employee. Because it is not only beneficial for the company, but also the society
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 391.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25063938619 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96542434359 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562659846547 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1545138548 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.3125 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4375 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144521120193 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452056219644 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326613058245 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844155892143 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178316190252 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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