The workplace nowadays is trying to employ the equal number of females and males Do you think it is a positive or negative trend

Essay topics:

The workplace nowadays is trying to employ the equal number of females and males. Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?

Most companies now focus on the working right of women and tend to balance the number of men and women in offices. To some extent, I partly agree it has negative effects on the working environment, while I would argue that the trend has more positive effects than negative effects.

A part of people thinks females should not work for two reasons. Firstly, people think women have to stay at homes to take care of their family members because of some traditional values in Taiwanese society. Because the lack of care of the children and the elders can become a serious issue if both parents have to work all day long. Especially, children do not have enough communication with their parents so that they might have mental problems or bad behaviors learning from the peers. Secondly, female employees are more likely to have the emotional issue which leads to the argument with their colleagues. It is reported by the statistical research of National Taiwan University that more than half of conflicts in offices are resulted from the disputes of female workers.

On the other hand, I believe that keeping the balanced proportion of female workers is more beneficial to the enterprise. In some industries, compared with males, female employees actually have a better performance. In cosmetics industry, for instance, women are more familiar with the products such as perfume or cosmetic cream. As a result, they often have more comprehensive marketing strategies. Also, women have some personalities and talents that most men do not have. Women can be more patient than men, which means female teachers are more suitable for the work places like kindergartens. In addition, women show a remarkable talent in music or painting which emphasize the importance of creativity.

In conclusion, although hiring a female employee might cause some problems, I still believe women have the right to pursue the career life as same as males.

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Average: 8.3 (27 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08150470219 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6825504809 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.624505925 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.3125 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9375 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5625 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120140999027 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418635503428 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366667029024 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080295932427 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246924406608 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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