Write about the following topic:
Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Today, a policy that is commonly adopted by the majority of developed countries is giving financial aid to the poorest ones, in the attempt to alleviate their economic sufferings. However, many people are still convinced that this is not the best way to help these nations, since little achievements have been seen, when compared to the efforts which have been made lately. Conversely, they insist that we should start giving them help through services in order to improve, firstly, the life quality of their citizen and, then, in a long-term, their financial problems. Personally, I firmly believe that the latter option is the most effective one because it allows us to better control where and how the sums are invested and to make wiser decisions on these concerns.
Firstly, I am convinced that giving liquids to poor nations is not a wise choice because their governments are usually not able to manage such high amounts and no benefit reaches their citizens. For instance, these countries often suffer from heavy national debts so, the first thing they do after having received the money, is to invest them to solve this kind of problem. As a consequence, albeit the financial aid which is given is massive, the population would not draw any beneficial effect from it.
Conversely, giving support through facilities would provide immediate benefit to society. As a matter of fact, a plethora of services can be offered. On the one hand, the first objective that we should bear in mind is the health of these people, who often suffer from bad alimentation and weak health care services. Hence, the building of new hospitals and of new structures for free food distribution will, undoubtedly, improve individuals' conditions. On the other hand, money ought to be invested for the future of the country, in order to improve their economy in the long-term. The best way to achieve this goal is by investing in the education of children. An example of solutions might be the building of universities and libraries and, additionally, the deployment of some scholarships to study in the most developed countries, with an obligation to come back after the degree has been earned.
In conclusion, I am convinced that if we really want to help the poorest countries, we should provide facilities, rather than money. Even though the latter policy is much easier than the former, the first one has immediate consequences on the population and, thus, the improvements, albeit they are not guaranteed, are likely to come earlier.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, hence, however, if, really, so, still, then, thus, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 419.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04057279236 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73880465108 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546539379475 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 12.0 2.52805611222 475% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.4152921043 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1875 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166849437507 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477606113989 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546171773378 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984765327741 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381103091313 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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