Youth in shopping malls

Essay topics:

Youth in shopping malls

hese days, young generation are spending most of their free time in shopping malls to do shopping or spending time with their friends. This trend brings negative influences on the youth, and as well as on the society. I am completely agree with this statement.

At the individual level, there are various negative impacts of this trend. First of all, the young generation not only wasting their time but also spending huge amount of money in shopping complex. For instance, youngsters tend to buy useless and unwanted products that end up never using them. They try to purchase branded clothing and other accessories in order to impress their friends that leads negative effects on their mates that who are unable to afford these goods. Besides, when young generation meet up with their friends, they might adopt bad habits such as smoking, drinking and stealing. As we can see that this trend has tremendous negative effects.

This trend not only brings detrimental effects on individual but also on the society. When the young generation spends more time in shopping plaza, they would have less time for education and physical activities. For example, a study conducted in British health institute showed that the youth who spend more time in shopping centres has suffered with cardiac diseases because they are eating unhealthy food that lead to obesity. As a result, health system would have to spend more money to treat such problems. Furthermore, they are not learning new skills and not involving in creative activities thus the society would have more uneducated people and unskilled workforce. As we all know a healthy society needs educated and healthy people in order to become a developed nation.

In conclusion, spending-leisure time in mall has detrimental effects on the youngsters and the society. In my perspective the youngsters should spend less time in galleries and more time in learning new skills, reading books and creative activities.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hese
hese days, young generation are spending mos...
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Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
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Suggestion: agreed
...well as on the society. I am completely agree with this statement. At the individ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...such as smoking, drinking and stealing. As we can see that this trend has tremendo...
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...on and physical activities. For example, a study conducted in British health inst...
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Message: "needs educated" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'educating' or 'to be educated'.
Suggestion: educating; to be educated
... As we all know a healthy society needs educated and healthy people in order to become a...
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Suggestion:
... reading books and creative activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.153125 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61648731305 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528125 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2628563607 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150221072259 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440032920216 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661432845224 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107188698763 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0886646022017 0.056905535591 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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