All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity?
Nowadays, the number of people, who suffer from excessive weight, has grown dramatically throughout the world. Some dietitians claim that there are a great deal of reasons behind this issue. In this essay, I will consider the causes of this problem and propose some possible remedies.
Let us start by looking at the reasons why obesity is on the rise worldwide. One cause of this is high consumption of junk food. Take schoolchildren for example. Pupils tend to eat too much fast food, such as soda, hot dogs and hamburgers, so that they not only gain weight but also suffer from weight-related disorders. Another cause is shortage of movement. In other words, office workers can easily become overweight because they predominantly lead a sedentary lifestyle. After analyzing these reasons, it is clear why both growing population and adults are affected by obesity.
Nonetheless, some dietitians state that this difficulty can be tackled. They suggest the following steps to take. First of all, to address this problem, the authorities should levy taxes on unhealthy food. Children would prefer homemade food rather than fast food, since it would become overly expensive, and they can hardly afford it too frequently. Secondly, this problem could be solved by promoting sports and healthy food. What I mean by this is that people with obese would either go to the gym or do exercise outdoors to improve fitness, if the officials showed them the benefits of both sports lifestyle and a balanced diet. After considering these solutions, it is obvious that it is probable to solve this problem.
In conclusion, even though there are plenty of factors why so many people experience obesity, personally, I think that it is possible to deal with this health issue by adopting the above-mentioned measures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1516.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13898305085 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75567159524 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654237288136 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8101643155 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2222222222 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3888888889 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329587934723 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853507088109 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643362832263 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162440425628 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700828252606 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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