The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is expected that the average standard of mankind’s health will deteriorate in the coming days. Although there are some people who argue that this is untrue because of the evidential medical advancements that modern society fortunately avails, I am firm that the damage in the health of individuals is sadly imminent.
One of the significant reasons why the public health is likely to diminish is because of the fact that sedentary lifestyle has become increasingly common these days. This is because of the nature of the modern jobs which ask for lesser physical work. On top of that, the type of work that most people nowadays do tend to involve more mental stress than ever before. There is a clear lack of exercise which is pivotal for the wellbeing of any individual. To illustrate this, the survey carried out by students in Harvard University indicated that 86 per cent of the participants lived a lethargic lifestyle. They mentioned that not only did the job demanded them to sit idly as a part of their tasks, but they also hardly had any time and mental motivation left to carry out any physical activity by themselves at the end of the day.
Secondly, the air pollution is significantly detrimental to mankind’s health and it is no surprise that the levels have been dramatically increasing for many years now. Along with the population, the demands of necessities involving fuel, gases and oils have been proportionately rising. This, in turn, leads to unrealistic amount of being incessantly emitted from factories into the open air. To cater the increasing requirements of the mankind, there is a proportional reduction in the quality of air surrounding the society. This is perilous to society’s health because it directly affect an individual’s lungs, blood, and the body as a whole. Furthermore, the food hygiene in today’s time is disregarded than ever before. Most people imprudently rely on junk food nowadays, simply because they are easier to consume and takes little time, but rarely do they realize that they could potentially promote illnesses like obesity and what not.
In conclusion, despite of the fact that there have been commending achievements in the area of medicine and research, I feel it entirely accurate to state that modern-world issues which involve pollution of air, increasing consumption of junk food and sedentary lifestyle could absolutely aggravate people’s health, essentially deteriorating the health standards of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 79, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
... public health is likely to diminish is because of the fact that sedentary lifestyle has become increasi...
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Line 3, column 585, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...to society’s health because it directly affect an individual’s lungs, blood, and the b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, in conclusion, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17079207921 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95476446205 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581683168317 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.7829933457 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5625 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167708225324 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476785514534 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458070282919 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101433659427 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256394659585 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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