Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality bring problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Today, masses of people have different attitudes towards being stars. Although a flock of them consider such jobs rewarding, others point out constraints, which are stem from being famous. I cannot absolutely agree or disagree with this topic, and my idea falls nearly halfway between.
When it comes to being a star, it leads to advantages, which are well worth the effort. Firstly, from an economic point of view, such occupation is one of the hot jobs, giving stars the opportunity to become rich in a short time in comparison with others. For instance, masses of rich people in the world are young celebrities who are in their twenties. Secondly, some people have an inherent tendency to popularity. this group seeks other respects, high social status. they believe popularity is a way which makes a profound contribution to achieve all their desires financially and socially. these are very reasons why being stars is beneficial.
On the other hand, popularity causes some drawbacks. celebrities have to shoulder social responsibilities, which may hinder them from experiencing onormal lives such as public. Because of being under cameras most of the time, they cannot make any mistakes. they are heroes for their fans, and it alleviates peoples’ expectancies. Bodies expect stars to participate in social difficulties and support humans like donating charity, offense homo sapience rights, and so forth. As a result, if celebrities want to keep their popularity among people, they should supervise all their actions, and all of these make life complicated for them. Besides that, despite the fact that celebrities can earn more money, they spend most of their time far from their families and besties such as football players and singers. And it causes some mental disorders for them.
In conclusion, I hold that being a star has both pros and cons, and this depends on individuals. How they can keep balance in this field, affect putting advantages or disadvantages in priority.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24844720497 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78095836153 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614906832298 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.7406762977 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154111327182 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443033123191 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437125980607 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915195405781 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020727934748 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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