Children are being exploited all over the world, for beggary, found in harmful factories and in unhealthy situations.

Essay topics: Children are being exploited all over the world, for beggary, found in harmful factories and in unhealthy situations.

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Recently, immatures are being used for different advantages by their parents either for beggary or working in companies as they were found in a miserable conditions. So I will explain in details how children are being exploited by parents.

To begin, there are a lot of children were found working in illegal age in companies, as they were forced to work in difficult jobs for the purpose of gaining money to their parents. Unfortunately, most of children who were found in these cases, their fathers addicted on drinking alcohol, cocaine, and other type of drugs. So immatures are being treated brutally in different situation. To illustrate, in Egypt was found enormous number of children working in illegal age, as they were deprived from going to school by their fathers to bring money for them in the purpose of buying alcohol items. Furthermore, the ministry of labour has registered hundreds of children work in mechanic workshop for fixing cars, as they carry heavy equipment which it will affect on their bones in the future. So children who are being caught reported that "they live in harsh situations in their home", they are unable to continue their life normally like the other kids, as they have a dream to go back to continue their education at schools. In addition children who were oppressed by their fathers, they found that they suffer from critical health conditions.

However, father's children who were found in these situations are practising passive habits, as they were not aware of anything, their concentration that children must only bring money for them. They do not care of their children health. Sadly, individuals were reported that they sleep in the street. "Whereas their cover is the sky and their mat is the ground". How sad is that. Life becomes brutal where there is no a kind of pity and mercy.

In brief, community should be aware about the consequences of this phenomenon, in addition, it could be decreased by putting a strict rules which it comes from government.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
... money to their parents. Unfortunately, most of children who were found in these cases, their fa...
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Line 4, column 758, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...hey carry heavy equipment which it will affect on their bones in the future. So children ...
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Line 4, column 1043, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...continue their education at schools. In addition children who were oppressed by their fa...
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Line 6, column 426, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...hat. Life becomes brutal where there is no a kind of pity and mercy. In brief,...
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Line 8, column 135, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'rule'?
Suggestion: rule
... could be decreased by putting a strict rules which it comes from government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, whereas, in addition, in brief, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02958579882 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68568011877 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520710059172 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9604664493 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.25 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160266406431 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649103389191 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482938809947 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120689871558 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571786840585 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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