Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business bring about the death of local communities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Two days ago, I read an article about the quick sprawl of shopping centers in Karaganda region. The author claimed that this spread drives individual entrepreneurs to terminate their activity in the local market. This leads one to wonder whether this stop may have a deadly effect on society. This essay disagrees with this point of view for the following reasons.
The first reason is that supermarkets provide local citizens with employment. The closure of private business may leave many inhabitants out of work, but malls may offer a great deal of jobs. Since they need workers both to maintain their department stores and deliver products to them on a regular basis, local people would feel little need to leave the area for a job. For example, many people, in Karaganda city, abandoned their decision to relocate due to the growing unemployment, once supermarkets, which replaced small business in the region, hired them as accountants, sellers, porters and security guards.
Another reason why domestic community can survive regardless of local business being destroyed by trading centers is the indirect connection between the destruction of compact business as well as local society. Even though local entrepreneurs cease their business, society will remain since it is also connected by other aspects of life, such as its traditions, customs, language, and history. For example, in Karaganda city, even though multinational companies eliminated their rivals in 2002, regional congregations have neither faded nor decreased in size as well.
However, some sociologists state that society will disappear after the small business. The main reason for this opinion is that the loss of local companies will result in a sharp rise in idleness. Joblessness may force many people to seek jobs in other cities. Despite this, supermarkets will be able to employ all jobless people in the region to discourage from abandoning the region.
In conclusion, after analyzing, it is clear that although the widespread of shopping malls may cause local business to quit the market, there is no need for people to worry about community because occupation is secured by shopping centers and. Furthermore, the link between business and society is insignificant.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33893557423 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76842827066 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591036414566 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.467475336 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.117647059 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217646346193 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671868872859 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467255880533 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119731422471 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423692821445 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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