Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business bring about the death of local communities.To what extent do you agree o

The way people will shop in the future has become a topic of debate today. While many people believe that internet purchasing will be prevailing and it will lead to closure of all shops in and around us, I disagree with this opinion. Because, with this development public urgent needs will not be fulfilled. Also, government may not allow this radical development as it can fuel unemployment issue.
Online shopping can never reach to the extent it will be able to trigger closure of all small shops in cities and villages because, they cannot support humans in urgent needs. For instance, it is wise to be dependent on a nearby garage instead of waiting for a mechanic to come and fix our vehicle when we are heading for an important meeting. Thus, this type of development will fail to help us our emergency needs.
Another reason that online shopping portals cannot replace offline shops is that government cannot afford rise of unemployment in the society. It is usually said that inefficiency is the biggest source of unemployment. For this reason, if things start getting efficient with the help of online supply services, then they may cause a blow to the employment in the society, which government may not allow and try to put a cap with a certain extent. For example, when oxford conducted a study of online supplies to the doorstep, it showcased that this will improve logistic efficiently by 50 percent and lead to lay off at least 20 percent people in the same industry.
In conclusion, although online shopping may snatch away bigger market share in the future, it cannot replace entire offline supply mechanism.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Suggestion: Also,
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e are heading for an important meeting. Thus this type of development will fail to h...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to rise'
Suggestion: to rise
...shops is that government can not afford rise of unemployment in the society. It is u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, then, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1351.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.825 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56862694601 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6521195075 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.583333333 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.046994610777 0.244688304435 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0197392800882 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0180004189091 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0282103939516 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021981215772 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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