Education for young people is important in many countries . However, the others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who can not read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, people have different viewpoints about the governmental investment on general education. In my opinion, while it is suggested that the spendings should be centered on cultivating the youth, enlightening the adult population is still worth an issue of concern.
First of all, there are many conducive reasons why the government should focus on extending youth education. When equipped with profound knowledge, young people are given a tool to take control of their lives and can be freely pursue what they excel at, which will eventually become a national benefit. For instance, if a child is endowed with football skill in his formative years, he needs special training courses and scholarships to nurture his ability. As the mentioned child has received enough training skills, he will become a professional footballer and achieve many medals for his home country. Besides academic knowledge, all youngsters should be bequeathed with instilled ethics lessons, since they are the most sensitive and are easily exposed to law-offending behaviour. Evidence suggests that in many remote areas of Vietnam, students who cannot gain access to primal education are likely to commit vicious crime like drug-trafficking, robbery or even homicide. Today’s youth is tomorrow’s future, so there is no denying that the government should invest a great amount of money on this school-aged group.
However, as the world is increasingly globally connected, education and knowledge should be made available for everyone, regardless of their age or social standard. By helping older generation to read and write fluently, political leaders have directly reduced the national illiteracy rate/incidents, making the country more advanced and investible to international companies. Moreover, when provided with general knowledge, older generations the middle-aged will play a more active role in assisting schools to educate their children. Take Eastern nations like China, Japan, Korea or Vietnam as examples, schools and families have a strong connection and an equal role in teaching a kid, representing proved by annual parent conference held in every semester. Another point worthy of concern is that in many parts of the world, elders have strong influences over their offsprings. Were it not for the ability to write and read, middle-aged people would not be able to approach source of reference related to civic; therefore they can not curb their children’s unlawful behaviour at their early stages. So as a fact, it is of fundamental importance that the older generations in families are well-educated.
From what has been discussed, while I believe youth education has many redeeming features, spreading general knowledge to older generation should not be trivialized. As long as there is a yearning for education, it is the government’s responsibility to assist them under no circumstances.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 1615.20841683 153% => OK
No of words: 445.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56853932584 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12178914708 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 176.041082164 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608988764045 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 506.74238477 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1812199328 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244223185115 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657121088661 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356767199173 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136297725411 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264934392939 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.26 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 78.4519038076 195% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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