It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree?
Thanks to the development of transportation, people now tend to go abroad to understand the cultural knowledge of people who live around us . While a number of people believe that it is not crucial to go on a trip to learn their way of living as some sources of information such as : books, films or the internet are also available. From my perspective , I would argue that I completely disagree with this opinion.
Firstly, it will be easier for us to learn about cultural knowledge if we get in touch with native directly. Instead of staying at home and watching some pictures or videos on television and computer boring , a journey will make you more active and excited. For instance, when you spend a period of time travelling to other places, you can make friends with indigenous people who best understand their culture and ask them to know more about their life or take part in some common activities. Moreover, meeting different people living in many lands not only help you to learn about cultural quintessences but also provides life experiences. For example, when you visit ethnic minorities, you will know how they catch fish by hand or protect themselves from wild animals.
Secondly, the information provided on platforms is biased and subjective. It is apparent that most articles or books about culture are written based on personal experience or feelings of authors who went through these places. As a result, the information we read may be incorrect and we can misunderstand about the people of these places. In addition, books or the internet can not provide enough information about unique features of the place which you want to explore. Thus, our knowledge will be limited and impose our thoughts on the residents.
For the above reasons, I firmly believe that learning new things from other people by travelling is necessary.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89067524116 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63211906745 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565916398714 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 311.0 20.2975951904 1532% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1521.0 106.682146367 1426% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 311.0 20.7667163134 1498% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 141.0 7.06120827912 1997% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346556550473 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.346556550473 0.084324248473 411% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212693028034 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507672272703 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 157.1 13.0946893788 1200% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -235.73 50.2224549098 -469% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 123.4 11.3001002004 1092% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.56 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 22.67 8.58950901804 264% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 9.78957915832 572% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 126.4 10.1190380762 1249% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.