It is true that whilst many people use their public parks, this space could be used for other purposes, such as building houses for young people or developing a business area to create jobs.
Explain to what extent you agree or disagree with this statement.
Nowadays, A lot of people make use of the public gardens and convert it to other uses, mainly for personal benefits, such as establishing of houses for youth or business area that facilitate the creation of new opportunities for job seekers. I agree with that with taking some crucial points in mind, not limited to, the socioecological factor and the sporadic structures away from censorship, these needed to be under the scope of decision makers.
From the socioecological point of view, gardens and landscapes keep sufficient consideration to the habitants' quality of life. That appears firstly in keeping a social space for families where they can go for a picnic, meeting their neighborhood and amusing their children in the play green area. Secondly, the green spaces keep sufficient amount of Oxygen beyond the eye relaxing effect. For example, When the elderly people go for a walk in the public parks, They could keep their bodies healthier. Therefore, from the social and environmental aspect, public gardens should not be invaded.
Also, the governmental supervision in these areas, more or less, is fundamental to flourish these areas.For instance, in some developing countries, there is a tremendous lack of censorship for the infrastructure buildings, among them public gardens, which is often resulted in abusing of the garden, rubbish may be scattered everywhere and there is no labor to clean that all up.
To conclude, the individuals and government should pay more attention to the social, environmental factors and that should be under supervision from the authorized personnel so, keeping a wide tidy garden places for public and encouraging youth to find jobs and houses can be also achieved.I hope in the nearest possible to see that is applicable
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So what should I do to
So what should I do to improve my writing?
According to the warning
According to the warning messages, you will need to add more content and make the length of sentences shorter.
Any advice about how to make
Any advice about how to make sentences shorter?
What is meant by more content?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1495.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24561403509 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95949052706 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59649122807 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.776564767 49.4020404114 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 166.111111111 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4444444444 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257148607735 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103506280671 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854200222116 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146514981549 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715485628297 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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