Many people think that having more money will make them happier How important is money to happiness

There has been a view concerning about one of the sources of happiness is from gain more income. I strongly believe the idea, and will, therefore, discuss the reasons with some relatived example.

From family perspective, Making money not only can bring a house but also can choose the best property location for the whole family members, such as walking distance to school for children, causing the purpose of safety fully satisified. Another significant argument in favor is that parents are able to take their children travel abroad frequently regardless budget consideration, therefore, children will understand more about our world and have chance to know people in another area, thus increasing their empathy giving them a widen life insight.

From personal perspective, gaining more income makes individual life enjoyful. Firstly, one's could choose ideal place to shopping or purchasing the commodity that people liked without budget problems. Seconely, self-esteem and self-confidence that people possessd depend on the cashflow in their bank blance sometimes, earning enough means cabability enough, the positive circle is protecting people looking forward all the time, they rarely have unsatisified career. For example, my preverious job was in a huge company but only offered me a low salary so I felt upset as long as low work efficicency. After I changed new job and made double income, my friend said I become a totally new person from inside and outside because I can choose what I want freely as well as I knew I have ability to done my work well to match the money that I earned.

In conclusion, money is the essential in people's life, it serves us to chasing a wide rage of dreams that we love so that is the happiness source.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...us increasing their empathy giving them a widen life insight. From personal perspect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07266435986 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69994215188 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667820069204 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.2263213837 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.6 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208627633989 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700811845205 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385114390874 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120943945712 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226703835795 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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