Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.Does this situation have more advantage or more disadvantage

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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities.

Does this situation have more advantage or more disadvantage

In the modern society, an increasing concern about time arrangement for many people form around the world is controversial issue. The new work life has a some negative and positive sides.In this essay I will examine both sides of arguments.

First of all, generally speaking there are a lot of reason for work hard why impact on people by badly. Each individual has to communication with the others.This requirement is vital for basic human body and soul.However, unfortunately within these modern decade everybody has to be join into tough work life.If they want to sustain their asset in the society.Therefore when people doing this work hard affairs, they missing a lot of things for amusement or resting and chilling.For illustration such as a manager could be perfect in own occupation but mostly this type of person should be alone and antisocial.And reason for becoming lonely is obviously spending a lot of time for work.On the other hands, most people kind of these they struggling with the health problems.For example, heart disease or panic attack.Because their life contained too much stress and irregular diet.

Despite of the these people health circumstance, they have succeed work life at their job. And obviously, this is a significant advantage for an employee and an employees. They could be easily become a manage.Moreover, this people provide luxury life when they will be retirement.

For illustration, most people prefer living in the quiet village for their old ages.They reach this dream easily.

In conclusion, I partially agree to both side. Because for everybody the valuable time is could be different. Some people might be consider to their kids or other one care of themselves. Therefore should be arrange this issue in concurrent.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23426573427 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00031173499 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597902097902 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 191.961512346 49.4020404114 389% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 124.75 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20534530992 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794685035685 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407782833387 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122308049628 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275146272935 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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