Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?
Weight gain is an increasing problem around the world. Mainly obesity is an issue among school children. This essay discusses about causes of obesity and how to overcome it.
To begin with, weight problem among school children is mostly due to unhealthy food. Most of the pupils like to have junk food such as burgers, chips, chocolates and coke. These food items contain fat and sugar only. The students can easily purchase these items from the school cafeteria. In addition, most of the parents have busy schedules. Therefore, children don’t get home made food and they consume food form cafeteria. As a solution, the school can order to replace these junk foods with healthy diet. Milk and fresh fruits can be used as alternatives. Another solution is parents can teach their children to prepare food by themselves.
Secondly, the lifestyle of the most of the students are not active. This is due to use of computer and television. Technology has changed most of our lives. Generally, young people play computer games or watch television during leisure time. This seductive life cycle causes weight problems. Schools should introduce physical activities for their students as hobbies. Swimming, badminton, basketball, football and cricket are some of good sports which provide good physical fitness. Furthermore, parents can encourage their children to involve in more physical activities by taking them to park to interact with others.
In conclusion, I would like to say, obesity is mostly due to the lack of healthy food and lack of physical activities. This can be improved by introducing healthy food and physical activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'replacing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'order' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: replacing
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Discourse Markers used:
['furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.302631578947 0.247107183377 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.144736842105 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0822368421053 0.0946595960268 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0328947368421 0.0501214627716 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0296052631579 0.0437548338989 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.101973684211 0.122226691241 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0230263157895 0.0403226058552 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62401321695 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0394736842105 0.0326793684256 121% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0723684210526 0.0861772015684 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0263157894737 0.021408717616 123% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00657894736842 0.011925033212 55% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1647.0 1933.35771543 85% => OK
No of words: 264.0 316.048096192 84% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23863636364 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20517956788 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397727272727 0.374742101984 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.306818181818 0.28420135186 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.215909090909 0.203846283523 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128787878788 0.137316102897 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62401321695 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.037074148 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.56093040696 104% => OK
Word variations: 60.4286116453 60.7387585426 99% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0891783567 137% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.7743622355 58% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.8334951092 49.517814964 50% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8636363636 127.492653851 59% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.0 20.7743622355 58% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.454545454545 0.814263465372 56% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 42.6818181818 49.1944974215 87% => OK
Elegance: 2.06349206349 1.69124875643 122% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238558493763 0.332605444948 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0783243706109 0.102741220458 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0725765999015 0.0668466124924 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.406857224506 0.534860350844 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139756214251 0.148594505496 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771624774333 0.134430193775 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042786940315 0.0742795772207 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.266398111304 0.324371583561 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0552417080554 0.0638462369009 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15818075966 0.228012699653 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025421747054 0.058150111329 44% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.41683366733 234% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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