More and more people would like to pay more attention to famous people who have achieved huge success in areas such as cinema, sports. Why do they attract much interest from people? Do you think it is good or bad?
It is true that well-known people play such an influential role in society and draw a lot of attention from others. This could be explained by many reasons. In my opinion, there are both positive and negative effects of such trend.
It is obvious that there are many reasons to explain why well-person persons always attract a attention of people. Firstly, famous persons, in particular persons who have great success in art and sports field are often to have an extremely beautiful appearance. Therefore everybody always pays more attention and wants to meet them in real life. In addition, famous actors are usually to look for the ways to foster their image in community though their PR team. For instance, some of the well-known people spend a lot of money in order to appear on newspaper or even on Television day by day which make many people feel familiar with them. Consequently, they are paid more attention by others.
We cannot deny that there are some drawbacks when people pay more attention to famous person. Absolutely, People could distract their works or study by spending more time to look for all information about a well-known person. As a result, their productivity of work is not good enough or cannot have their final test with flying color. Surely, there are also many benefits when a well-known person draw attention to others. This could be attributed the fact that the ways that well-known person strived to achieve their success such as hardworking and practising instead of only base on talent which is also the best lesson for people who admire their idol resulting in many people would follow the ways of a famous person to obtain their success.
In conclusion, there are several reasons to account for the trend why well-known persons draw more attention from many people and I strongly believe that it has both positive and negative aspects as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.925 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5230190249 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51875 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5373147889 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.066666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7333333333 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265464881263 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992048264631 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687516779438 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172995911492 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437791364496 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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