Nowadays, families move to different countries for work. Some people think it has a negative effect on children, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Emigration to a new country has been prevalent amongst people throughout the world, especially those who live in underdeveloped countries, to find a better state of living and more appropriate financial condition. This issue has sparked controversy over its effect on children of emigrant families. While many people favour the idea that it contains a lot of drawbacks including spiritual and social ones for children, others argue that it could serve children by enormous advantages. I am of the view that although it benefits children in different ways, its downsides should not be neglected.
To begin with, children who have been forced to emigrate to a new country with their families might encounter challenges in front of them which are to be settled. First of all, when you move to a new country, it is inevitable for you to learn the language of that country to be able to communicate and satisfy your rudimentary needs. Although it is allegedly said that children are more likely to be successful in learning a second language than adults, this fact could not be denied that learning a new language is a challenging mater for every individual which requires immense endeavour to be fulfilled. Furthermore, children are categorized as the most emotionally sensitive group of the society becoming dependent on their present living environment and surrounding people like their friends, teachers and so forth. Therefore, they might be more susceptible to emotionally remain bonded to the people of their previous life and suffer from the absence and lack of those people resulting in several emotional and spiritual problems for them. Last but not the least, children might find it so difficult to blend into a new society with thoroughly different and kind of exotic culture, especially at the very first months of resettlement. Based on the age and the personality of the emigrant adolescents, the level of this difficulty could differ from one to another.
On the positive side, children could benefit from certain advantages provided for them by the new society. Firstly, a new society could supply children with new educational opportunities which did not exist in their own countries. It is commonplace for people to migrate to developed countries which embody suitable educational facilities like schools, universities and training institutions. This way, the children of the migrant families receive more decent education proliferating their fortune of becoming successful in the future. Furthermore, when parents are compensated better for the work they are doing, could more easily support their children and eradicate the poverty which could have been encountered if they hadn’t migrated and had stayed in their own country. Besides, children who overcome the challenge of resettlement in a new country at young ages, would personally fortify and gain more self-esteem which is of great privilege in their future.
As outlined above, while emigration to a new country provide different benefits for children and could ease their way to satisfaction and prosperity in life, it comprises its own drawbacks and challenging problems which are likely to outweigh the benefits, unless they are dealt with properly. Whether migration to a new country is beneficial or not is a matter of fact that intensely depends on the way that a family manage it and get along with it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 452, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...family manage it and get along with it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, while, kind of, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2850.0 1615.20841683 176% => OK
No of words: 544.0 315.596192385 172% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23897058824 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91693827002 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 176.041082164 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496323529412 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 891.9 506.74238477 176% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.2845071544 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6315789474 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197439979273 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691869281847 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308510541581 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136490475682 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247402676505 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 78.4519038076 184% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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