Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or a negative development?

Essay topics:
Nowadays, many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In this day and age, most of the schools gain more money by selling junk foods to school students during their afternoon break. Recent research shows that about 70% of the school provide fried foods to their students while they are in their lunch time. Obviously, this is a negative development as it precursors to hazardous effects like Obesity, chronic diseases at an early age. We will discuss the ill effects and suggestions in the below essay

First of all, school management should not be money oriented and they must care about their students. Few of the schools sell unhygienic foods inside the campus which includes Ice creams, Soft drinks, Fried items and highly contagious food items. It doesn’t only invite diseases but also degrade the reputation of a school. For instance, due to the recent incident happened at West Bengal in State school of Calcutta piqued overall state disease level by 10%. The students were provided with cheap ice cream which was manufactured from nearby pond water. Eventually, nearly 400 children fell sick and could not recovered from the disease for a month. Management should be cautious on what is being served inside the school.

On the same vein, this negative development can also lead to ailments at a young age. The latest Unicef report shows that Obesity has increased for nearly 20% among young generation when compared to last decade. This proves as an evidence that these Soft drinks and unhealthy foods will have negative impact on the kids. Level of sugar added in these kinds of drinks is 25 times greater than the normal drinks. Apparently, students will prefer junk foods over traditional healthy foods.

To elucidate, schools must be careful in selling foods and be mindful of what is being served. They can replace these scrap foods by vending healthy foods like fresh juice, sprouts, vegetable salads, tender coconut etc. This will not only fortify the health benefits but also affordable to the school kids. It is my hope management should give utmost priority to these food habits and not be inundated with the profits gained by selling unhealthy foods and drinks.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'recover'
Suggestion: recover
...ly 400 children fell sick and could not recovered from the disease for a month. Managemen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, so, while, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01966292135 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35050936361 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.8824203196 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.0526315789 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279016924683 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817639966407 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625018690753 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172671146363 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490975986122 0.056905535591 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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