Majority of entertainment, which contains murdering and violence is being rated by society with high marks for many years. It is especially popular between youngsters. One of the camp considers that this enjoyment of emulated crimes influence on children real life. The others believe this kind of entertainment has no impact on kids development. This essay will discuss both these points of view but I believe emulation of violence in harming children mentality especially in the youngest age.
Obviously, everyone understand horror and action films are not real. Most of the films have scenes containing fightings or killings but these are not commonly seen in our real life. Therefore it is not be taken seriously because a brain recognises an emulation of it.
In the other side, children copy behavior and character of their heros. Commonly, all superheroes in the films or games are involved in some kind of violence. So for kids who are very young is quite difficult to distinguish what is positive and what is negative sides of their idol. Therefore it can have a negative impact on developing mind of teen injecting false statement that violence is appropriate behavior in the reality.
To summarise it is better to keep the kids out of seeing violence as long as it possible in my opinion. Since it might allow them to interpret false idea of impunity violence and lead to misbehave as a result. It would be helpful if frequency of crimes and murdering could be reduced to minimum on a screen.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, kind of, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1261.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96456692913 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77709793211 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610236220472 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4990100832 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.0666666667 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9333333333 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194008393195 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520095625084 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429894272811 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955907653181 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502692079076 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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