Obesity is a serious problem in many countries especially in rich countries Discuss ways to solve the problem Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Essay topics:

Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is true, that overweight became a huge issue for the last couple decades. Mostly it has influenced people from reach and developed countries. Let us discuss the problem and try to find some solutions for decreasing this issue and keep residents more healthy.

Firstly, in my opinion, the main reason of obesity it is unthelthy food such us fastfood, french fries and soda drink. In developed countries it is so much popular and cheap so people allow to eat fastfood every day. For example, when humans is a very busy during the day, and in the evening coming back to home and, ofcourse, have not time and pover for cooking the dinner, so they just choose easy way and buy fastfood. As a result after day by day eating burgers, fries and drinking pubs during the couple years, they possibly can get obesity and, in additional, problems with heart or worce cancer.

Secondly, another couse of overweight there are not enough level of moving activity and physical exersises, becouse most residents of urban countries spend their day incide the offices. As a result, they possibly can get problems with healths too.

However, I suppose, for reducing this problem government should decrease amount of advertising of fastfood companies on TV and media and increase emount of sports facilities in big cities.

In conclusion, the overweight it is a really big and huge problem for all the people and their healths around the world, but if provide some methods for solving this problem, in coming years it possible take under control.

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Average: 7.7 (16 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, i suppose, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92692307692 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46068194233 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638461538462 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6187773659 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.454545455 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.0 7.06120827912 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141017188673 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520325522522 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410505875994 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768552167424 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033579166192 0.056905535591 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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