It is undeniable that being overweight has become a pressing issue worldwide and some affluent nations are badly affected by this. Although it is a sensitive case to tackle, a systematic and long-term approach may help it eradicate it.
To begin with, obesity issue among all age groups can be curtailed if the government ensures easy availability of essential infrastructure. This is because if people find such establishments at a stone's throw away distance either from their place of residence or from place of work, they may consider going these places in their free time. When a Singapore municipal corporation, for instance, adopted a similar initiative, local people welcomed this move and started going regularly to gyms, yoga centers and jogging tracks. With this type of experiment after one year, Singapore government's official records showed a 2 kg average reduction in their citizens' weight.
In addition to this, to combat this problem importance of fitness must be incorporated in school curriculum. This The reason for this is children's ability to learn and follow their childhood habits for a lifetime. Juveniles, for instance, if start learning about various sports and exercises during their school hours, they may develop interest in such subjects. As a result, after returning home, they may ask their parents to participate in their sports activities. This will also become their habit in the long run, which may avoid obesity risk unless there is some other reason behind their obesity.
In conclusion, despite serious obesity conditions worldwide, both rich and poor nations can mitigate this problem by taking corrective measures. However, I personally think individual overweight depends on a number of reasons and a systematic approach towards our lifestyle may reap better benefits for us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37282229965 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81290215026 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668989547038 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1504970676 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.615384615 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.062174222722 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0255546880436 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403361499008 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0441574084744 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471794847945 0.056905535591 83% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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