One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
With the technological advancements and the use of modern facilities the medical care has advanced increasing the life span of the people. Although, they share with the community their knowledge and life experiences which in turn leads to development, they put a pressure on the family and economy of the society. In my opinion, with the enhancement in healthcare facilities more benefits are provided to the world which will be discussed further in this essay
With the refinement in the medical amenities people will live prolonged and healthy life as it will provide remedy to almost all the ailments in the world. Moreover, the society will have older people who have more knowledge and exposure which they can gift to humanity. For example, many professors, researchers, writers and scientist can impart their life experiences, expertise and knowledge with younger generation. Furthermore, these are an asset to the companies as they are enriched with erudition, skills and experiences which will help in the growth and expansion of the organisation
On the contrary, there are some drawbacks associated with the increase in the life span of the humankind due to the advance medical treatment. Firstly, The old generation are a burden on the society as they are more prone to health care treatments and diseases. This will put a pressure on the government of the country as they will have to spend more money on medical equipment’s, medicine and health care rehabilitation. For example, there is a financial burden Countries like Japan to cure and heal the diseases of the elderly people of the society. Moreover, they will have to hire more doctors and nurses which means more money will be disposed off as they salaries. Secondly, the senior citizens put a constraint on the family as they will have to spend more time on taking care of their physical conditions and taking them to the doctors for regular check ups along with doing job. Dur to which they will not have anytime for their own or their children.
To conclude, older generations are not a burden on the country’s financial economy and their family instead, they are contributing actively in the community by enlightening us with their understanding, expertness and life long achievements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1907.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12634408602 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93647207558 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467741935484 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.8833062598 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.692307692 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0859742385571 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391843811011 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02222301852 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055526559905 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222762540334 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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