One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
With the advances in technology and the use of modern facilities the medical care has forged ahead improving the life span of the people. Although, the elders will share with the community their knowledge and life experiences which in turn leads to development, they put a pressure on the family and financial system of the society. In my opinion, with the enhancement in healthcare facilities more benefits are provided to the world which will be discussed further in this essay
Owing to the advanced medicinal technology, there are some drawbacks connected with the increase in time of human existence. Firstly, the old generation are a burden on the society as they are more prone to health care treatments and diseases. This will put a pressure on the government as they will have to spend more money on medical equipment’s, medicine and health care rehabilitation. For example, countries like Japan have a financial burden to heal and cure the diseases of the society's elderly people. In fact, more doctors and nurses will be employed which means more money will be disposed of as their salaries. Secondly, the senior citizens put a constraint on the family as they will have to spend more time on taking care of their physical conditions and taking them to the doctors for regular check-ups along with doing job. Dur to which they will not have any time for their own or their children.
On the contrary, people will live prolonged, healthy and energetic lives with refinement in the medical amenities as it will deliver remedies for nearly all the world's ailments as well as they will actively participate in many sports like golf, chess and so on. In fact, the older and more experienced generation of the society will gift to the humanity their knowledge. For example, there are many professors, researchers, writers and scientist who can impart their life experiences, expertise and knowledge with younger generations. Furthermore, they are an asset to the organisations who are enriched with erudition, skills and experiences which will help in the growth and expansion of the administrations.
To conclude, the advantages of the improved medical facilities outweighs the disadvantages. Even if, the older generation put a financial constraint on the nation, but still they help in the development of the society by sharing its valuable knowledge and expertise.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, as for, for example, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 389.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13881748072 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92909581653 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483290488432 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.3536398147 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.266666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981133677215 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437283568742 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453508222312 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691936945996 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00644390950971 0.056905535591 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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