One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
With the advances in technology and the use of modern facilities, medical care has forged ahead improving the life span of the people. Although, the elders will share with the community their knowledge and life experiences which in turn leads to development, they put a pressure on the family and financial system of the society. We will weigh the advantages and disadvantages of the In my opinion, with the enhancement in healthcare facilities more benefits are provided to the world which will be discussed further in this essay
People will live prolonged, healthy and energetic lives with refinement in the medical amenities as it will deliver remedies for nearly all the world's ailments as well as they will actively participate in many sports like golf, chess and so on. Research studies have shown that with the increase in the life span of the people means more older generation in the country. They more the experienced and knowledgeable community. For example, there are many professors, researchers, writers and scientist who can impart their life experiences, expertise and knowledge with younger generations. Furthermore, they are an asset to the organisations who are enriched with erudition, skills and experiences which will help in the growth and expansion of the administrations.
On the contrary, owing to the advanced medicinal technology, there are some drawbacks connected with increased life expectancy. Firstly, the old generation are a burden on the society as they are more prone to health care treatments and diseases. This will put a pressure on the government as they will have to spend more money on medical equipment’s, medicine and health care rehabilitation. For example, countries like Japan have a huge financial burden to heal and cure the ailments of its elderly people. In fact, more doctors and nurses would have to be employed increasing the fund allocation as their salaries. Secondly, the senior citizens put a constraint on the family as they will have to spend more time on taking care of their physical conditions and taking them to the doctors for regular check-ups along with doing job. Due to which they will not have any time for themselves or their children.
To conclude, the advantages of the improved medical facilities far outweigh its disadvantages. Even if the older generation puts a financial constraint on the nation, still they help in the development of the society by sharing its valuable knowledge and expertise.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, as for, for example, in fact, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 401.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20947630923 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99253948455 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496259351621 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.4497460595 49.4020404114 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5625 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118627240035 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044373029122 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401936751353 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802242350733 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00779519963332 0.056905535591 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 9.78957915832 215% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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