One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Elevation in technology has not only attributed to scientific discoveries but also created a hand-in-hand impact in the field of medicine. This century is well blessed with comprehensive medical care and the lifespan of people has enhanced through the modern medicines and treatments. I believe the result has enlightened the human civilisation and the disadvantages of increasing life expectancy are ignorable.
Nowadays people are more health conscious with diet restrictions, daily workouts and routine checkups. Ultra modern facilities and advanced medicines have transformed the situation and cured many deadly diseases. With improved lifespan, people contribute more to the society. Early retirement plans let them start another profession as they are more active these days. For instance, many professionals these days start their own business after their retirement. This trend welcome freshers to have jobs and eradicate unemployment.
As a direct result of improved life-expectancy, people can spend more time with their family and grandchildren. Working parents can leave their children on a safe hand while at work. The way grandparents care for their grandchildren is incomparable to the attention they would receive from a daycare centre. From this regards, we need our forefathers to be with us than ever before.
The way many see the elder generation as a responsibility to the society is no longer true. These elder people can share their experience that we can use to build a better and safer world. Older politicians, bankers, writers and researchers have far more to offer than young ones.
Improved lifespan profoundly benefits the family as well the society. We should feel obliged to treat our ancestors as they did for us. They are no longer a burden, but assets for the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43109540636 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03177329135 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618374558304 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8066537835 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.8947368421 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8947368421 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31578947368 7.06120827912 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137606038608 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413536895954 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442371915603 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747490198833 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417316934203 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.62 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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