In the past, the primary motivation for professional sports people was the pursuit of sporting excellence and to be the best in their field. Today, professional sports people are most likely to be driven by the pursuit of money and fame. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
In the previous time, the main goal for sportsmen was to achieve the best results and to break records. Nowadays, sports people tend to be more focused on money instead of personal success. I disagree with this statement; I personally believe that sportsmen’s motivation depends mostly on character, not on period of time people live.
One main arguments that I would like to make in this debate is that most of popular and successful sportsmen came from poor family that means they started their career when they did not have any financial interest and not when they became well paid. Let us take one Croatian footballer Luka Modric as an example. He was brought up in very poor conditions while there was a war in his country. At first, he had to pay money to a sporting academy, when there was no money even on food. If sportsman is born in low-income family, he cannot work hard only due to money, he just does not know what it is.
A different yet principal reason is that the world sports records are being set now more frequently that in the past. For instance, usain bolt and michel phelps have broken world records in main disciplines as swimming and running recently. It does not seem like they follow cash rather than excellent results.
To conclude, I am totally unsure that sportsmen nowadays is hunting wealth more than sport success. Since if it was true, world records in swimming and running wouldn’t be broken by usain bolt and michel phelps in near times and they would be set by sportsmen who already passed away. Furthermore, people who rise in poverty tend to be more hardworking and not to crave luxury life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, well, while, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1367.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74652777778 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51073841491 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607638888889 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.620196106 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6428571429 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241593170338 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805418249461 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058781996222 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146215615817 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412990005611 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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