In recent years, a farming practice has changed to include methods such as factory
farming and the use of technology to improve crops. Some people believe these
developments are while others regard them as dangerous and advocate a return to
more traditional farming methods.
Discuss both the points of view and give your opinion.
We must admit that technology has infiltrated in almost all fields of life and work. This also means that there are many radical changes in the field of agriculture too. A lot of technology is used for the improvement of crops. However, this has led to divided opinions; where a group of people believe that it is essential, while a few others think that it can be damaging and so we must use the traditional ways of farming. Therefore, before commenting
on my decision, both views will be analyzed.
Focusing on the first view, the most important argument the supporters put forward is that of the increasing demand. Due to the increase of the world population within the last century, the traditional methods are largely insufficient to provide food to all, and so the use of technology and the concept of factory farming are welcome. Besides this, we need more efficient methods of farming. This is because several countries in Asia and Africa suffer from long spells of droughts and famines. This means that people will starve if genetically modified crops are not grown. The innovative implementations have saved many lives. Moreover, the sector of agriculture has less manpower then the past and therefore, Technology has proved a boon to make farming less labour intensive.
On the other hand, the latter viewpoints out the risk. To begin with, some say that this can cause a serious threat to the health of the individual and the environment many fear that changes in farming methods can diminish the nutritional value of the product and can be a source of some unknown diseases. Also, the land may be lost its fertility gradually. Another drawback is considered is that the originals spice me slowly disappear and this can change aspects such as the test, colour, appearance and the quality of the food.
To conclude and give my opinion, I would support the former opinion more than the latter. Although there are a few drawbacks, it is a fact that with changes in the farming method due to technology, the world has definitely become efficient to satisfy the growing demands. However,
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fear seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fears'.
Suggestion: many fears
...h of the individual and the environment many fear that changes in farming methods can dim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93258426966 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69026636967 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570224719101 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8474826578 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5555555556 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189570698557 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506785625658 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555589588154 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682356223331 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487560067371 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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