Some believe that modern technology has made people less socially active, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that cutting-edge technologies, such as the Internet, have fundamentally revolutionized communication’s framework. Despite all achieved benefits obtained from these technological breakthroughs, there are still some people criticizing these achievements as the underlying reason for an ever-increasing alienation from society. In the following paragraphs, both conflicting opinions to this argument will be analyzed, and a rational conclusion will be proposed.
A sizeable number of individuals, especially those holding conventional beliefs, cite that new technologies would widen the gap between individuals within a society. Firstly, it is a widely shared notion among those resisting against modern technologies that nowadays people are more likely to squander their time chatting with their virtual friends behind their personal computers instead of having some quality time with their family members or friends. The interaction between members of a family is of paramount importance for individuals since lack thereof can exert destructive impacts on their later lives. Having been deprived of adequate social interaction, one may encounter several obstacles when applying for a job as interpersonal skills are of high priority for most employers. Moreover, children as the main victims of the widespread use of modern technologies might become afflicted by isolation. This is mostly because that, unfortunately, they appeal to having more followers on their Instagram account rather than expanding their circle in the real world. This behavior, if not controlled, can result in a generation of youths lacking proper social skills.
Although there are numerous potential hazards entailed in new technologies, several benefits can be gained if they are used in moderation. One notable advantage of the exploitation of the aforementioned technologies appears to be a greater opportunity for those who are living far from their family, such as international students. Students who have left their countries in hopes to accumulate decent knowledge from prestigious universities abroad are now capable of getting through to their family via making either video or voice calls over the Internet platform. Apart from the facilitation of communication for abroad students, many may argue that people, particularly who are not adequately confident to establish new friendships in the real world, now can find new friends owing to the prevalence of social networks, such as Facebook. These virtual friendships are not destined to stay so for permanently, and therefore, can be developed and be turned into real ones.
By way of conclusion, although the danger of isolation cannot be explicitly denied, with regards to plausible benefits, I believe that humankind can take advantage of the emergence of new technologies if excessive use is avoided.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...n of communication for abroad students, many may argue that people, particularly who are...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chnologies if excessive use is avoided.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, apart from, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2446.0 1615.20841683 151% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74178403756 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26696812625 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 176.041082164 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603286384977 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0670879556 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.875 106.682146367 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.625 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0879439527908 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0281559069386 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0266312936914 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564019946966 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251236276912 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.37 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 78.4519038076 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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