In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.

What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Nowadays, overweight and lack of fitness is a widespread phenomenon that should be considered immediately because of its serious effect on people's health. In this article we will discuss both aspects and solutions for such an issue.

first and foremost, the main reason for this problem is the sedentary lifestyle which became significant today in some countries. To explain, it is obviously clear that there is a lack of physical activities like walking or playing sports among most of us. this is a result of today's modern life facilities like the availability of cars to almost every adult, or also the phenomenon of new technological hobbies, Video games or addiction of surfing the Internet for example. Furtherly, the problem of gaining weight is admittedly a result of unbalanced diet which contains low nutritional values such as vitamins and menirals, but rich with fatty ingredients. Fast food, burger and fries for instance, are famous examples of such kind of harmful food. this is a result of increasing number of restaurants that focus only on commercial products rather than its benefits to customers.

this problem can possibly be solved by two main solutions. first, by launching awareness campaigns, which can be funded by governments or individuals, to boost the idea of eating healthy, and enhance the community to be more active. role models such as football players or social media influencers can do this role properly. The second solution might be carried by governments, not only to encourage children and youngsters by launching sports champions among schools' teams of clubs, but also to encourage elderly and women by arranging national marathons and offering rewarding prizes for the winners.

In conclusion, overweight is a worldwide problem which is a result of the sedentary lifestyle and the unbalanced diet in today's life. However, this problem can hopefully be solved by awareness campaigns or establishing sports league for different age levels.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32594936709 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89735885786 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594936708861 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1470372853 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.214285714 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105883245964 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385460895035 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364366335554 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694735512451 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139827536453 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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