In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that children in some parts of the world are becoming obese and unhealthy. I agree with the role of the government in resolving this vexing issue. However, I also believe that the role of parenting and school settings should also be emphasized.

Childhood obesity and children’s health problems should be partly blamed to the authority. We cannot deny the fact that overweight children are of high chance to be vulnerable tonumerous serious diseases such as diabetes and hypertension, which poses a dire threat tothe national growth of any country as they are the future’s human resources. As a result, the authority should be accountable for mitigating this problem. Take China as a good example, the governing body has been taking action to lower obesity rate among children by organizing boot camps where children are physically trained to lose weightand take up daily healthy habit. This is because China’s political activists are scared of the scenario that these overweight children will not be able to meet the physical demand to join the army.

Besides the governmental role, parents and schools are also liable for their children’s good health. Regarding the former, working parents nowadays tend to devote virtually their whole time to working in order to ensure material wellbeing, which means that they may spend less time carefully taking care of their children’s diet. Therefore, without supervision, children might eat unhealthy food or lead a sedentary lifestyle. This explains why close parental care and control is crucial in ensuring children’s balanced diet and healthy life. In terms of the role of education in teaching children about health living, some schools inclined to place emphasis on theoretical subjects as math and literature, and neglect the importance of physical education, which reduces their students’ workout frequency. School efforts to promote healthy diet and engage students in physical exercises are irreplaceable in tackling the problem of child obesity.

In conclusion, the government, parents and schools should all shoulder the responsibility for protecting their children from obesity and unhealthy lifestyles.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56213017751 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99427139991 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609467455621 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6317673759 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.333333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5333333333 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221221105008 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870030794464 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590193088201 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147978635797 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555635337075 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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