Some parents do not want their children to work part time while in school so that they can
concentrate on their studies. Other parents believe their kids should learn to manage study and work
duties as this teaches them certain skills they cannot learn at school and therefore better prepared them for
the real world.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views.
Some parents argue that school is the best time and place to gain knowledge and practical skills should
therefore be their children’s sole focus. Other parents want their kids to gain practical experiences, namely by
way of employment, in addition to theoretical knowledge. Both perspectives have merits and drawbacks, as this essay will demonstrate.
Having a job provides/arm young people with many useful tools, among which are time-management,
networking, and multitasking skills. These tools are essential components of one’s career, regardless of
occupational goals. While it can be argued that students with part time work risk not having sufficient time to
dedicate to their academic projects, those who learn to balance their studies and work schedules will be better
able to manage their careers and home lives in the future as a result. Take, for instance, working mothers: they
maintain home while performing their work tasks at a professional level. In contrast, kids who only studied,
without the added responsibilities of work, might find it more difficult to adjust to the new reality of adulthood.
Conversely, the focused students likely achieve better academic results, thereby securing admission to
higher-tier schools and, consequently, better employment opportunities. Moreover, they ability to focus on one
thing at a time will be reflected in their ability to complete tasks at a higher level of proficiency. One may argue
that the modern workplace demands a higher level of soft skills, where these “professional” students, unlike their
peers who may develop these skills through their interactions with a greater variety of people, might come up
short. Yet, as careers become increasingly specialized, the ability to hone particular skills may ultimately trump sociability.
In conclusion, both approaches to employment during school have positive and negative aspects. While the
part time workers may gain more practical and social skills, the academic students benefit from a better focus on
their tasks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: part-time
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...sitive and negative aspects. While the part time workers may gain more practical and soc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70512820513 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17464348793 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612179487179 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3982335974 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.142857143 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.38176352705 411% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319872164723 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0977710895389 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876586197755 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876463835631 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773554755966 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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