Some people believe that the family has a greater influence on the child's development. Others believe that other influences have a greater influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Although it is sometimes accepted family plays a significant role in a child's development, there are some who throw a balance in favor of other factors such as television, music, and friends. However, I believe that the progress of a child is an interplay of both family and external factors.
On the one hand, people claim that children can learn moral values under the eye of their parents. As a result, they can become responsible citizens in the future. For instance, younger minds need proper guidance to survive in society. Hence, only parents can teach them as they are emotionally attached to their wards. Additionally, parents are well aware of the needs and capabilities of their blood and can teach their children in a simple way.
Moreover, children need individuals attention to learn better which is possible only when one has the blessing of having parents.
On the other hand, many factors such as television, music, and friends are thought to make an individual confident and learn more skills such as confrontation and co-ordination. In other words, a child can learn how to be independent. To illustrate, students in schools, who have a positive friend circle, are better in decision making. Furthermore, many movies are proven effective in making children aware of history and the culture of various countries. So, they widen the horizons of minds. Not only movies but the music in them also work wonders in helping the young minds to learn about the customs and the traditions of their nations. Punjabi songs, for instance, showing many areas of Punjab can persuade many to learn more about it.
In conclusion, considering both the viewpoints, I am convinced that all the above-mentioned factors are crucial in developing a child's mind in the right direction. However, parents need to supervise their wards whenever they are in the company of their friends. Giving equal importance to every factor is key to the holistic development of a child, I believe.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a simple way" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...heir blood and can teach their children in a simple way. Moreover, children need individuals a...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ren need individuals attention to learn better which is possible only when one has the...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ngs, for instance, showing many areas of Punjab can persuade many to learn more a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03963414634 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81271274561 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542682926829 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.296126089 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8333333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115005471775 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036489764392 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518309087505 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726608803064 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749757014231 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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