Some people believe that main purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers instead of to benefit them individually.
Schools and other educational institutes are considered to be the lighthouses of a nation as they perform a great job by educating students and help build an ideal nation. If education is the backbone of a nation, schools are the places where this is shaped and polished. However, it is a never-ending debate about the main purpose of schools. I agree that a school's main purpose should be to turn students into honest and good citizens instead of turning them into selfish money making machines.
First, the main purpose of education is to build up an enlightened nation where morality, honesty and integrity would be the key characteristics of the citizens. They would keep aside their personal ambition and work together for the betterment of the country. Since a school is a place where education is planted and taken care of, its main objective should be to focus on nurturing morality and good human characteristics among the students. What good will it bring to the society if a talented and experienced doctor treats patients only for the money he earns? Should not we have more professionals whose main purpose is to help others? If we want to have more people who would actually help others instead of turning into money-making machines, we should focus on our education system, especially what we teach our children.
Second, states spend a lot of money to keep the schools and its education system running. A major portion of this spending comes from the tax ordinary citizens pay. From this regards, if schools plan to adopt an education system where teachers’ sole purpose would be to teach children how to be personally benefitted, the whole education system would lose its main purpose. We have to be very careful while educating children. What we teach them in their early stage would become their permanent characteristics and if the schools fail to teach them to become ideal citizens, it would be a great concern in the future.
Finally, personal benefits, memorising some lessons and getting good grades should not be the main reasons children attend schools and the true personal benefits do not lie on the amount of money someone earns, rather it is defined by the happiness and morality we gain in our life.
In conclusion, making ideal citizens and dedicated workers should be the true objective of our schools. The greater good of the society, bright and prosperous future of a nation and personal achievements of individuals are connected with the way we teach our children in schools and that is why our education should be focused on morality and quality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a school' or simply 'schools'?
Suggestion: a school; schools
...e main purpose of schools. I agree that a schools main purpose should be to turn students...
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Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...rom the tax ordinary citizens pay. From this regards, if schools plan to adopt an ed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 436.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97247706422 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73774826272 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465596330275 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0876136412 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.444444444 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260470513365 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086439830104 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840013445083 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157003119903 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568683584263 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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