Some people believe Olympic Games are not required for 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people believe Olympic Games are not required for 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by a significant number of individuals that Olympic events are not needed for the current period. I disagree with the notion because it helps different nations to make strong friendly bonds by allowing their player to participate in such games and generates wealth for the host nation.

To begin with, the Olympic Games are required to boost a healthy and friendly environment between conflicting nations. International games involve athletes of these nations to take part in games at a single platform and mixed audience of competing nations to stand for their players to encourage them, all this creates a recreational and strong emotional environment to show patriotic feelings towards the nation while supporting their sportsman. As a result, these games act as a stress reliever from political differences and binds people irrespective of their different nationalities.

Similarly, these games boost the economy of the nation by hosting these events. Firstly, tickets sales in such events are always high because of the demand of the viewers and the profit of the tickets directly benefits the organizing authority. Secondly, such sports provides a platform for the host nation to increase tourism by presenting culture, tradition, and aboriginal activities of the nation through media. For example, recently para Olympic competitions held in India brings million dollars revenue for the country and the boost the tourism to peak level during the month of the game.

To conclude, I believe that such world level games must continue because of the reasons mentioned in the above paragraphs. In future, these games may play an important role in bringing peace and humanity to above all.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, while, for example, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35055350554 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75426094448 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579335793358 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4026589462 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.818181818 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6363636364 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184743355127 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729233188607 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404055909144 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112647945899 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224156822489 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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