Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
When teenagers finish school, they have to make up their mind about whether they continue their studies with the aim to obtaining Bachelor Degree or they seek a job. While getting a job right after graduating from high school can bring us a rich variety of benefits, I would suggest that teenagers should go to college or university.
Getting down to working straight after finishing school is attractive for various reasons. The first reason is that teenagers can be more independent when they dedicate their time to earning money. As a result, they will be able to settle down, start a family or having enough money to travel. Another reason is that starting to work as soon as possible can help them escalate up the career ladder much more easily. This is because they will have a greater opportunity to embark on widening their horizon, gaining real experience and learning practical skills related to their chosen profession, thereby resulting in a successful career.
On the other hand, I would argue that that it is far more beneficial for students to keep studying to get a Bachelor Degree, rather than pursue a career. Firstly, without any qualifications acknowledged by a college or university, the young people will find it more competitive to successfully get a job which they have a burning desire for. Secondly, academic qualifications are required in many professions. In other words, there are hundreds of positions in a company which requires a relevant qualification to get into, such as doctor, lawyer. As a consequence, while lack of academic qualifications exerts a negative effect on the career path of the young people, university graduates can seize more and better job opportunities, earn higher salaries.
For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that it is highly likely for students to have a better career in later life if they have a university or college degree.
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Suggestion: that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02523659306 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84175131878 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593059936909 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3668804984 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.538461538 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181200953721 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653078253019 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490306049828 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110188504198 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372064082946 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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